Raindrops-new fic!!

[borntobeelphie]

Ok! here goes! this is my first fan fiction! please comment and tell me what's bad! llam!

It takes place right at the begining of Act 2. And for the sake of the story there is about two months between the acts!

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Part 1

Raindrops fell outside the foggy window. Teardrops slid down Elphaba's cheeks, and even though it burnt like hot coals, she couldn't stop herself. Tonight was the night of Glinda and Fiyero's engagement ball. News spread quickly, and eventually, even she, knew about it. While everyone else in Oz was celebrating, she sat in the small cabin in the woods, crying. One tear hit her open book hard as she continued to sob. How could this happen? Why, two months ago, Fiyero had told her that he loved her and she was the only person he wanted to be with. Now he was to be married to Glinda. Glinda. She was so oblivious. Not once did she even suspect...

She remembered that first night. Her first night with Fiyero. What seemed so long ago, wasn't. It was pure magic. All she ever wanted. And now she realized what she had given up with nothing in return. He had told her that he loved her, but was it just a lie? The tears came faster now. It just went to show how much someone can change in such a short period of time. She was living proof of that. Suddenly, it didn't matter anymore. She pulled herself together. The rain had stopped. She paused. "It never rains on Galinda Upland." Glinda had told her that once. And now it was working in her own favor. She smirked, pushed the door open, and mounted her broom. She knew what she had to do, and there was no one stopping her now. She had a score to settle with the "wonderful" wizard of Oz.

[borntobeelphie]

Raindrops fell outside the car's window."A ball? Honestly Glinda. An engagement ball?" Fiyero was quite puzzled. He had been very puzzled lately. Since the second he proposed to Glinda things had been...different. And not the kind of different he liked. The kind of different that made his insides get all twisted. He had to do this calmly, though. Step 1: Propose. Step 2: Become captain of the Guard. Step 3: Find Elphaba. He wasn't really sure what to do after that, but it would come in time. The only thing that he was sure of was that he needed to tell Elphaba the truth. That he really did love her and he really did want to spend the rest of his life with her, not Glinda.

"Yes dearest! I just couldn't be happier for us!" She turned to him. "Would it kill you to put on a smile?" He was looking outside the window. The rain trickled down. "What, oh ,yeah. But you know-" She stopped him. "I do. I know. I can't stand it either! But we have to deal with it. I'm a public figure now. And I mean, who could resist this?" "You know who could. Who has." "Fiyero. I miss her too. But we have to face it. She doesn't want to be found." He was still stairing out the window when they pulled up to the Ozdust. The rain had stopped. The car did, too. "Come on. Let's go." He had different plans. "You know what, I'm going to take a little ride. Get some fresh air now that the rain's stopped. I'll meet you back here. You just go inside." He had a feeling that the Wizard knew more than he was letting on. As soon as Glinda was safely in the building he turned to the driver and said "To the palace, and step on it!" Fiyero needed to see Elphaba, his Fae. And he would do anything to get to her. He figured the best place to start would be The Wizard. And that's where he was headed.

[galindafiedgirl215]

keep going, cause you are off to a wonderful start!

[Twisted]

Very good. Just, in the second part, the dialouge is slightly hard to read...if you could just put it into normal dialouge format:
("blah" said soandso.
"blahblah." replied whatsherface.)

then it'd be easier to read and to tell who's talking. Other than that, no complaints here.

[wickedelphie1121]

yeah this is good! please continue! ;D

[borntobeelphie]

oh wow! thanks guys...i didnt even think it was good! llam! post will be soon..its in the editing stage riight about now...so it will be here soon! again,thanks so much!

[GoodWitchGlinda]

Very cute! I'm really liking it so far! Can't wait till you continue!

[borntobeelphie]

ok...mabye it was done sooner than i thought it would be..but here it is. and oh yeah..thanks Twisted..definitly taking your advise! ive been waiting to post this for a long time (i've had the whole thing written for like 4 months!) but i couldnt find the right place! now im happy!

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Elphaba had no intentions of bargaining with the Wizard. She was just there to set the monkeys free...and to keep her mind off Fiyero. But when she arrived, the Wizard made her an offer she couldn't refuse, that is, until she found Doctor Dillamond. But her mind shifted as Fiyero decided to make his grand entrance. They shock on Elphaba's face matched the one on Fiyero's. He ran to her and she threw her arms around him. He went to kiss her, but she pulled away.

"Fiyero, I have something to tell you!" She squeezed him tighter.

"No, I think you have something to tell me!"

Fiyero and Elphaba both turned to the doorway, where in it stood Glinda, in her pink ballgown, looking lovely as ever.

"You mean...all this time...the two of you...behind my back?"

Elphaba had told her so many lies, but there was one more to tell.

"No, Glinda! It wasn't like that!"

Fiyero took a good look into Elphaba's eyes. He realised what he was giving up for her.

"Actually" He didn't care what he was loosing, for he was gaining the love of his life. "It was! But hey? Come on Fae, let's go!"

And with that he yanked her out the door. She mounted her broom and they flew off into the night sky.

[wickedelphie1121]

oh wow...this is getting better and better. cant wait to see what you do next! ;D haha we both said "oh wow"

[borntobeelphie]

hi! is there anyone who would be interested in helping me with the next post by editing it? i really coluld use some hep if it's at all possible! thanks so much!

[Twisted]

I'll help with editing if you want - PM me!